lol kinda of comical,
and awsomely discriptive.
the way you describe everything is beautiful!
^^ sounds as though things are about to get interesting. No? lol
well i enjoyed this chapter though you are right there are still some bugs in the system. No matter, i can read around them. ^^
wonderful first chapter, very uniqe plot, cant wait to see what you do with it!!
Keep up the great work