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wheyz q.                   (User #1579) N/A 10/09/2005 05:00:40pm

Let me guess. You're angry at your friend and boyfriend and you're letting it out through this story. Am I close?
The story part is fine--gruesome, but not as bad as I've seen elsewhere. At least it had a little plot. Your style is OK, except for your use of ellipses (...). They are made up of three periods, not two. Using them too much interrupts the flow of the story and makes it irritating for some people to read. Hint... ;-)
I'd rate this 6 of 10. My reasons are those above.

sp_gd_freak                   (User #1041) N/A 07/23/2005 05:30:46pm

ooh, this is really good, the end is the best. what goes around coems around lol

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