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Part #10 - Final: Celebratory Kiss
Solana Shadow Plague                   (User #9269) N/A 05/27/2011 11:16:42am

Aww... Cutes!!!
I loved the line about how Christian was a stupid name because while I read this I was sitting right next to my best friend Christian. ^_^

JustLoveToHate                   (User #9971) N/A 05/25/2011 10:17:51pm

Hmmm Im disappointed there was no more mention of jmmy!!! I'll just
pretend he got out with Matt and they lived happily ever after lalalala
anywaysss zacky and Brian are so cute in this brians all protective and

Liera                   (User #9529) N/A 05/25/2011 04:43:44am

very cute =]

Part #9 - Chapter Seven: Despair
Solana Shadow Plague                   (User #9269) N/A 05/19/2011 11:15:19am

No! How dare they not allow homosexuals into schools!! That is complete bullshit!
Epic story. Keep going. =)

Liera                   (User #9529) N/A 05/19/2011 03:30:05am

Loved it.
Can't wait for the next chapter =)(=

Part #8 - Chapter Six: Goldenburg
Solana Shadow Plague                   (User #9269) N/A 05/11/2011 11:17:44am

I'm glad somebody's doing something about the bullying. All schools need to do that.
Keep writing!!!

Liera                   (User #9529) N/A 05/11/2011 06:29:32am

haha, guess i read this a little too late to give ideas. When did you update this before?
I never even saw it o.o
but i love this, it's really awesome ^_^

Part #7 - Chapter Five: Something Biblical
Liera                   (User #9529) N/A 05/11/2011 06:15:43am

Aha, i have completely forgotten about this story for a moment cuz it's been forever since you've updated ;)
As far as idears, herm....let's say zack decides to allow everyone at school find out about him & Brian. The guys obviously give them a hard time about it. But Zacky starts getting some lady friends (i always see gay guys swarmed by girls haha) and they guys of the school get jealous & don't understand. Let's say one day Brian is either sick or they lock him away somewhere and kidnap Zack. They plan on torturing him before trying to kill him. Brian desperately trys finding him and stuff and then that's all up to you. It could lead up to the part of Kristin's idea where they graduate & Matt gets them to pass the law of no bullying. Something awesome along those lines? I love thrilling moments. Suspense. Intense moments that have you on edge. Twists. Anything that your mind can create that will kick the readers in the face haha. hope some of this helped. It was just something to try & get your mind jogging again ;)
Anyways, i love his parents :)
I love how Zack got all worked up & then was all confused like.
It was adorable XD

Kristin                    (ANONYMOUS) N/A 04/29/2011 04:38:15am

This story is fucking great. I'm sort of new to this
website because I just recently got back into fanfiction
after like, three years, but I love your story and I REALLY
don't want you to "poof," especially after I just read all
of this and I'm dying to read more xP Okay, so as for
ideas, maybe these seem cheesy, but they're just some
things that are straight off the top of my head, so hear me
out: I'm not really sure what you were getting at with the
"I'm scared about tomorrow" thing (that more kids would
beat him up or something?), and I don't know what you could
put in between, but maybe at the end, you could have them
graduate and Matt could get out of jail with a slap on the
wrists because he could get inspire lawmakers to pass some
monumental bill about school bullying and it could all be
this gargantuan symbol for Zacky's freedom from himself and
his insecurities. I don't know, just some ideas. But I love
the story. Keep going

Solana Shadow Plague                   (User #9269) N/A 04/28/2011 08:54:47pm

Dood...Matt's got the coolest parents EVER!!!!
Hehehe, Zacky's got the coolest boyfriend ever too. =^_^=

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