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Liera                   (User #9529) N/A 01/02/2011 06:29:11am

Aha, i had totally forgotten what he had planned on doing to Ana's "closet". =) Haha, i figured Natalie & Jimmy would be perfect for each other! He may not get along with her as easily as he does with Cookie Pie, but i'm sure he likes her sass :) loved the chapter sweetheart. not i'm off to bed lol nighty nighty

Haylie Jaed                   (User #3426) N/A 04/13/2010 06:02:18am

I was starting to wonder when Gena was going to show up, and now I'm left wondering when we're gonna see her again. Because I'm sure that won't be the last that we see of her. And it's just horrid that in all the places to be in L.A., she had to be at that same bar where they were.

Nat and Jimmy was just inevitable. I wonder how they're gonna feel in the morning. XD

xoxo
HJ.

Katie                    (ANONYMOUS) N/A 03/19/2010 09:12:51am

I couldn't be bothered to sign in
and this will be short because fanworks is ducked and ruins my reviews
omg! I could totally see where Zack was coming from but Ana too.
Like I found it hilarious and gross at the same time
I will write you an email like tonight or tommorrow :)
btw, I have missed your writing
did I tell you that it was reading this that got me writing again?
:')

-sarah- ~foREVer~                   (User #7685) N/A 03/19/2010 02:27:35am

That didn't suck :D
I absolutely adore Natalie! She
and Jimmy are perfect. Haha
Ah! It was so great. This story
always makes me smile and it's
gooey and fantastic! XD
UPDATE SOON! Hehe, and go Zack
for telling Gena off!

synsterr                   (User #7349) N/A 03/18/2010 04:42:30am

I'm sending it to you in an email, dammit! >:(

synsterr                   (User #7349) N/A 03/18/2010 04:42:03am

Fanowrks.. you muthafucka... haha.. it cut off about half of my
review... heeres all of it..

Oh my god.. that was GREATNESS! Of course it didn't suck, you're
too awesome to suck. Haha.

And as much as I thought I wouldn't, I actually LOVED all the
mushy stuff! Its nice to read a good story that talks about the
emotional aspects of what their characters are feeling, rather
than JUST the dialogue telling them they love each other. Lol.

Hooray for using my music choices!! Hahaha.

synsterr                   (User #7349) N/A 03/18/2010 04:40:55am

Oh my god.. that was GREATNESS! Of course it didn't suck, you're
too awesome to suck. Haha.

And as much as I thought I wouldn't, I actually LOVED all the
mushy stuff! Its nice to read a good story that talks about the
emotional aspects of what their characters are feeling, rather
than JUST the dialogue telling them they love each other. Lol.

Hooray for using my music choices!! Hahaha.

stumplover89                   (User #6833) N/A 03/16/2010 02:30:01am

I loved it!
What's funny is right before I saw you had updated, I'd been thinking how
much I miss the story. And then bam I see the name of the story at the top
of the list and couldn't help but squeal!!! Yay. Lol

Okay, lets get to reviewing cause I have quite a bit to say about this chapter.
Where to start?...

It's so adorable that Zack is so whipped and willing to do anything for Ana,
even to answer her phone when he's dead exhausted. It gave me all
butterflies inside at how sweet he is. Seeing this new side of Zack is
awesome cause we get to not only love him for it, but we get to read how
each emotion is affecting him in a good way and how for someone who is in
love for the first time ever, he is dealing with it well. It's great. I love it.

“You're her what?!” - for a moment there I went 'uh oh' cause I thought an
ex boyfriend decided to make an appearance and cause drama. Lol. Only to
hear it is Natalie, who I am happy we're going to see more in the story now
cause she is simply hilarious. The whole hanging on to Jimmy for dear life
part made me laugh loud cause I couldn't help but imagine it. Four crazy
people in one story make for a good reading in the next few updates I am
sure.

Now, I know I might be hated for this but I can't help but actually feel bad
for Gena. I think her spite for Ana comes from hating the fact that she didn't
get Zack to love her but Ana did. Clearly Gena is in love with Zack, it's no
rocket science to figure out and just like how Ana was depressed and trying
to get away from Zack just so she doesn't get heartbroken, Gena did the
exact opposite when she was 'with' Zack and therefore did get hurt badly.
It'd be nice to see her accept that she's not going to be with Zack and move
on. And who knows, maybe they can all become friends when she does.

Okie, that's all I gotta say besides how much I loved this update. Now go
ahead and bring the next one up so we can see how dangerous it gets
between Jimmy and Natalie. Hehehe

haleyhollows                    (ANONYMOUS) N/A 03/15/2010 11:24:57pm

didn't feel like signing in.
this was amazingg :)
i love reading about jimmy...even now. it makes me feel like...all warm and fuzzy inside.
lol(:

anywho. this was amazingly perfect, better than that, like always :) keep up the good
work darlingg :)

Hanny Gates                   (User #8413) N/A 03/15/2010 11:00:37pm

That didn't suck at all...
I loved it
and I can tell by how long the other peoples reviews are that they didn't either....lol
And THANK YOU for updating...
But if you have to you can take as long as you need to make it good...
Like this one... =]
Zack and Ana just keep and getting cuter and cuter!
They are sooo perfect together!
And then Nat and Jimmy really are cute together too...
But that would be very awkward...
Having your two best friends in the other room having sex....
I would like tweak!
Will the whole nat and Jimmy thing turn into something more or will it just be a one night (or however long) stand??? lol
I'll just have to wait and find out! :D
Please update soon!
But remember to take as much time as you need to make it good!!!!
This chapter was amazing!!!

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