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Hellbell Shadows                   (User #7632) N/A 08/06/2011 11:50:21pm

Poor Zacky, like Jimmy once said, he is more fucked up than Ana.
It's so sad and weird that now they're just friends.
But I just loved the day dream Zach had.
And the are so alike, she thinks she's masochist, he thinks masochist, but we all know they are.
I have to say, the cutest thing in the world is Zacky worring about Ana, he never worried about anyone but himself, and now he's worring more about her than about himself.
Is just so amazing.


Liera                   (User #9529) N/A 12/30/2010 05:45:42am

this was such a tease! lol omgarsh this is killing me! i'm feeling everything they're feeling along with anger & sadness & disappointment lol. I so thought them getting together in his office was real! i was so excited lol and then it got crushed XD ugh, they need to snap out of it and get back together already. They both can't stand to be away from each other! ugh :(

Haylie Jaed                   (User #3426) N/A 04/11/2010 02:39:04am

It was nice to see that night from Zacky's point of view, though I hadn't really expected anything other than what we got. ;)

The phrase, "It is better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all" hit me as I was reading the last few lines of this chapter. I can completely see the appeal of Zacky's lifestyle - never loving anybody so that you can't get hurt. But, as always, you can't help who you fall in love with - and it's bound to happen eventually. So I guess it wasn't Ana who was doomed right from the beginning here - it was Zacky. Somebody was going to be his downfall in the end.

The little "moving out" comment broke my heart. I know it's only a room away, but it would have the same sort of impact, I'm sure. And I feel bad for the pair of them - this is going to be torture.


synsterr                   (User #7349) N/A 03/04/2010 01:49:16am


I think this might be your best chapter yet.. the Pulp song fit so
well, it amazed me. I guess I read at the perfect pace because as
soon as I got to part 2 in the story the drums kicked in, and it felt
exactly like a movie. I pictured everything. AMAZING.

I like how your writing in Zack's head lately. Even though you're
not a guy obviously, it still feels like these could really be a guy's
emotions about he could be feeling for someone.
As usual, your writing astounds me. Haha.

I LOVED the Blue October song in here too. Another that fit
amazingly well.

I'm sad Zack is sort of giving up.. but I guess he's kinda running
away from his new-found feelings.
Oh, and his daydream about having sex on the desk was
HILARIOUS. As soon as he snapped out of it, I literally was like "Oh
man.. " hahaha. Totally great.

Next chapter. :)

pixxehh.v                   (User #6514) N/A 01/18/2010 10:50:30am

Make sure you send me pictures! I want to seee!
I feel so bad for not reviewing lately..

Ha, I read and reviewed the last chapter before I read this one and was stil thinking about how I wished I was in Zack's head and then this was from Zee's POV!
Yay! Perrfeeeeccct!
But I hated this chapter.. It was all going the way I wanted it to - Zee and Ana finally getting it on once again - and then you hit me with that!
Who could have possibly thought that was all in Zack's mind?! Only you...
At least we know what he feels, even if he doesn't.
When are you going to stop making him a dick and let him realise that he is in love?! I mean, they were practically in a boyfriend/girlfriend relationship before.
Why can't he stop being a douche and just realise that?!
And realise that he is good enough for Ana.
And when will she see that Zack had given everything?!
Arghh, so many questions! >.<
This review is getting rather silly.
In fact, I am beginning to think that I am rather silly..
I shall stop nowwsss!

Samantha A7X                   (User #8125) N/A 01/17/2010 09:51:05pm

You almost had me there with the 'daydreaming' thing... WHY OH WHY DO
YOU KEEP ON DOING THIS TO ME? I was soooo thrilled that they were... er,
making up. But oh nooo, it was all a figment of Zacky's tainted brain... Nice.
Very nice. Ugh. Is there no making up, then? :( Buahhh stupid Zackary... why
can't he just admit that he's in love with her? Why is it so hard for him to
understand love's not the devil, as he appears to think? Okay, those
questions are beyond stupid cause you dedicated the whole chapter to let
us know what Zacky thinks and how Zacky feels, so I guess I understand his
position (no I don't) but that doesn't mean I AGREE with him... I'm sooo
Ana's team lol

The song... Of course I did the whole process I downloaded the song, as
you adviced, and then I read listening to it, rewind it when it reached the
minute 1:37 (in the official song that's when the first part end), then waited
until it reached minute 1:37 again and read the second part of the scene....
MY GOSHHH CHILLS WENT UP MY SPINE! I had never heard the song so I
wasn't sure what to expect about the whole change in the music... Geez, you
did it with that... AWESOME!!! it was sooo like watching a movie... I re read
the scene and re listened the song like ten times!!! it was just such an
amazing experience... really, I don't know how you come up with all this
stuff. AMAZING. And yeah, of course it fitted perfectly, the music AND the

Oh, and My Never was also a great choice... I could picture Zacky walking
down the beach, all torn inside, the song orchestrated the moment
perfectly, and the lyrics, oh the lyrics... exactly as he was feeling...

I'm still mad at him, though. He needs a wake up call!!

stumplover89                   (User #6833) N/A 01/17/2010 02:51:38pm

I am SO in love with this story it's ridiculous! I just read the whole thing for the
past two days and it has been nothing but amazing. I have to say. breaking my heart. I wish he could just make that one move and just
admit his real feelings.
You're such a good writer. This story is that fresh cool breeze you need on that
annoyingly hot summers day. Relieving.
I love this story, and I can't wait for the next update.
Ps I also want to see your Jimmy tattoo.

LEADSAILSpaperanchor                   (User #8343) N/A 01/17/2010 04:38:27am

I'm totally in love with this story and have been for a
while. Yours is actually what inspired mine somewhat. Update
soon, and good luck with the tattoo.:)

itsvickyy                   (User #7605) N/A 01/16/2010 11:58:52pm

so heartbreaking!
but i'm glad you're writing again.
i personally think you should post the new sections soon..i
can't wait to read them!
and i'd like to see your jimmy tattoo!

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