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Hellbell Shadows                   (User #7632) N/A 07/29/2011 10:31:28pm

I totally love how Zacky is kind of scared of making a move at her, after knowing his 'story' with relationships is good to see that Ana changed him.
And Jimmy! I absolutely adore him (both in real life and in here) He's just this crazy ass dude, who does what he wants when he wants and well, he's Jimmy, there's really nothing else you can say about him! I just love how he and Cookie Pie are best friends, I strongly doubt he would let she go back to Colombia.
Well, Brian is just useless, I have to admit I wanted to kill him when he got in the guitar lessons. Such a cock blocker!
I still think he feels something for Cookie Pie too, but what do I know?
I wonder what's going to happen next.
I'm just in love with this story.


Liera                   (User #9529) N/A 12/28/2010 11:05:41pm

Omgarsh, this was absolutely freaking A-MA-ZING!!! i'm so excited XD i loved the part where she was sitting on Zee's lap learning to play guitar. O, i would have melted there! Shhh, Zee is my husband. He just doesn't know it yet XD lol anyways, this was great. I love the chemistry between her & Zee

Haylie Jaed                   (User #3426) N/A 04/10/2010 02:34:52am

I don't usually like stories where the POV switches around, but you pull it off really well and I love seeing the conflicting emotions from both of them. ;) She sees Jimmy as a best friend - could Zacky possibly start to view him as a threat? That would be interesting. I wonder how Jimmy feels about her. o.o

I love how Brian couldn't make a milkshake to save his life. XD I also love your milkshake receipe - ice, huh? I've never used ice in a milkshake. I want to try that now. Hmm...

Only one more month to go. D= But I think Zacky is planting the seeds for her to stay - maybe as a designer for Vengeance University? XD That's what I thought that was - and now I must keep reading!!


Screaming Silence                   (User #5693) N/A 02/01/2010 02:06:47am

Again, this is fantastic! I loved it.

You have a knack for getting out information in such a way that the reader doesn't feel like an idiot! This chapter flowed just right, moved at the right pace.

This is a superb story hon, and I can't wait to continue it... but right now, I need to sleep. ::Insert sad face here::

I'll be sure to keep reviewing (even though I'm a little behind!) every chapter!


~Embrace The Madness... foREVer~                   (User #7321) N/A 10/30/2009 11:28:44pm

wow... and I totally missed this chapter because...

I have a really good reason. I was IN Huntington Beach, playing tourist. But when I read the next chapter I realized I'd missed something, and came back and read this one.

It's very well written, thank you so much for sharing it with us!

Okay, what else can I say? I'm really horrible with reviews... I really am...

Can't wait to see what happens next!!!

synsterr                   (User #7349) N/A 10/26/2009 07:00:26am


I have to say, you are up there with the best of them. You're
writing is just absolutely fantastic. All the details just make
everything so much easier to imagine, and just make the chapter
awesome overall.

Zack and Ana are so cute!! I love that for the first time, Zacks
totally stumped on how to handle his feelings for a girl. Haha. Its
pretty much adorable.

And Brian? When the fuck did he become Mr. Relationship Expert?
??!!!! Hahah. He sounded all intellectual, and badass. XD

Ana's and Jimmy's relationship is awesome too. Jimmy seems like
the ultimate best friend. Totally crazy, and knows how to have a
good time, no matter what, but is there for you in an instant, no
matter the circumstances. The M&M scene was hilarious! Loved it.

I also love how you made Matt the "Gretchen Weiners" of the
"She knows everything about everyone. That's why her hair is so
big..its full of secrets." Cept Matt's usually close to bald.. hahaha.
Mean Girls was on TV this morning, so it fit. =P

And I can totally motivate you!!! Hahha. I can't WAIT for chapter
Definitely, your story has become my most anticipated. Haha.
its just so awesome, and well-written.
Update ASAP!!!!!


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