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|Part #44 - Chapter 41/Land Of Dreams
I’m keeping a running review going. This bitch is gonna be
fucking epic. In size, not content. My reviews are starting
to suck balls.
Chapter One; Zack’s an ass. Matt’s cute. Mother’s a
complete boot. Bill needs a good castrating with a blunt
knife. Don’t cry! Matt’s being nice…
Chapter Two; Aww. Breakfast. I’m grinning and don’t know
why. Matt needs to get his ass in my pocket right now. Hmm.
Chapter Three; Pinch hard. She gave up custody that
easily?! I wanna tear hair out right now. And that’s unlike
me. I’m a punching kinda girl. Don’t you cry at me, Andi’s
mom! Jimmy likes food. I approve. Better not be a fricking
dream. I’m ignoring you guys just to read this.
Chapter Four; I would pay anything to be woken up like
that. The could bounce on my bed any day… Brian is cute
when he smiles. Wait, Brian’s just cute non-stop. Awww.
Zacky’s putting her make-up on for her. I retract my
earlier statement about him. Anti-Johnny? Who? I love him.
He’s the only one I’m taller than. And for me, that’s
something amazing. Brian. I love you. Lots. Aww. Leana’s a
sweetie. Yay! Visits!
Chapter Five; Zack, stop smoking so much. You’re making me
want a cigarette. No horror movies? To each their own… I’m
dying a little. Can’t stop laughing! No movie night would
be complete without a horror. I want a Zacky pillow… In
fact, screw a Zacky pillow. I want a Brian pillow. He looks
Chapter Six; Haha, Matt, you should have just gotten up.
See the funny side! It was great! Matt’s parents… I love
them. They’re just so cute. Ooh. What is she doing there? I
guess I’ll just go find out….
Chapter Seven; Food is everywhere. It’s making me hungry.
It’s half four in the morning and I have no food and there
is nowhere within walking distance that’s still open. This
is entirely unfair. Gena watch those daggers now, they’ll
turn around and get your eyes soon. Confusing indeed.
Chapter Eight; Psycho puppy? I have one of those. I call
her my sister. Aww. I wanna hug Zack. Yep. Total dreaming.
You’re in a coma.
Chapter Nine; I can’t remember what 8:30 looks like
anymore. I never see it. Lol! Of course she would want to
know if you saw anything…
Chapter Ten; The tour descriptions are amazing, very
gripping lol. Naked Johnny… Does nothing for me. Designated
naked zones? Interesting… Yeah, Matt, don’t fuck with the
teenagers. I’m giggling at Green Day. When Billy Joel sings
Wake Me Up When September Ends he always sings ‘memor-ee’
it’s hilarious to me. A lot of work. A lot a lot a lot of
work will be needed.
I’m taking a break now. My laptop sounds li
Like it’s about to die. Which it did. I have never loved
auto recover more than I do now. FanWorks better let me
post this bitch when it’s done!
Anyway, I love how ‘big brothery’ everyone is towards her.
And then how sweet Zacky constantly is, now that he’s not
an ass lol. I still wanna smack her mother and Bill around.
They deserve it.
I’m at over five hundred words…
Chapter Eleven; Girly sleepovers are terrifying. I was only
subjected to it once. I crawled out barely alive… Aww. I
think I may love Zack just a little. He’s so cute and shy
Chapter Twelve; Aww. Tired Matt. The big brother seal of
approval. Once she’s an adult, of course. That’s how it
always seems to go.
Chapter Thirteen; You made me want cake. Not that that’s
hard but still. I’d be exactly like the guys if someone had
me up at that ungodly hour of the morning. Especially now
that my sleeping pattern is sort of sorting itself out.
Yay, he took it well. Lol! In your author note it says
‘BRAINS BIRTHDAY’ that has me giggling.
Chapter Fourteen; Lol at the secretiveness. Secretiveness
was my six hundred and sixty-sixth word. Aww. Brandy thinks
it’s a joke. I wish my patio came with one of them, too.
That is one hell of a story to catch someone up on. The
banter is great. Just like with a real family. They do
care, never doubt it.
Chapter Fifteen; Is it edible? Who cooked? The apprehension
is amazing. I’d laugh at that. Hard. Aww. Kisses in front
of everyone. Lmao! The dream! Hahaha!
Chapter Sixteen; What a way to wake up. That first pee of
the morning is always a special one =P
Getting tickled seems to be the way they enjoy waking them
up most. I was kinda surprised when it didn’t happen this
Matt’s parents… Parents wouldn’t be parents without some
Chapter Seventeen; I was wrong. I could go change it but
no. Birthday dinner! Those always seem better than normal
dinner out. Maybe that’s just me. I wish that’s all I had
done for my eighteenth. I can barely remember it. I know
there was something that happened with a statue in the
middle of Glasgow City Centre and one of my friends but
that’s about it. I woke up in a strange house with a road
Chapter Eighteen; He asked at last! That’s good =]
LMAO! That is all.
Chapter Nineteen; Aw. A Zacky bed. Sounds comfy. My floor,
is not. But I’m stuck with it for just now. It doesn’t rain
all of the time in the UK… just throwing that out there.
Yes. The ground floor is the freaking ground floor, not the
first floor. Excuse me while I have a Friends moment….
LONDON BABY! Wow, a nice Londoner. Only in a fictional
story… aww. Actually sharing a bed without Matt totally
freaking out. I never saw that one coming.
My laptop keeps dying in amongst other things. I’m not a
slow reader, I just have a short attention span right now
because if my cracked ribs. It’s all fun and games, though.
Chapter Twenty; No, no you should not go see what it is
that Matt wanted. You should keep doing exactly what it is
you are doing and more because you will never get any
privacy than you are offered right now. Ahem. Sorry about
Chapter Twenty-One; Oooooh. Rated R…… Okay, who WOULDN’T
stare at Brian’s bare, sweaty chest? I feel dirtier than I
think I would if you HAD written a sex scene…
I can’t help but think that this time last week I was being
dragged along the road by a bike much heavier than I am.
Kinda makes me feel it all over again.
Chapter Twenty-Two; I just got images of Jimmy being all
cat like lol. I used to get called Abby when I was younger
because of her. Now that I’m older I can see why but at the
time I hated it. I love Jimmy. And… awww! They love each
other. Yes, being a girl is extremely confusing. Being a
guy seems so much easier! But I like being a girl so…
Chapter Twenty-three; I was wrong. I need a shower.
Chapter Twenty-four; Spotted indeed! Is Mallory who I think
it is? I miss that girl…
Chapter Twenty-five; Ooh, jealous! Ew! Matt! Not at the
dinner table! Yes, some women like to eat but all women are
protective of deserts. There’s an unspoken rule ‘touch my
desert, lose a hand.’ Aww, that was such a nice thing to
do. I can totally see them doing just that.
Chapter Twenty-six; I was in Vegas as a toddler. Can’t
remember any of it but according to my cousin, who was
twelve at the time, we had a blast. I had Family Guy
flashbacks when you quoted Forrest Gump.
Chapter Twenty-seven; I giggle every time you call him
‘Berry’ lol. Lol! Shifting in their seats… Zack’s very…
eager lol. I have to admit… I’m glad they saw the freaking
show! Haha! You wrote it so very very well and I adore you.
Chapter Twenty-eight; ZACKY WHAT THE FUCK?!?!?!?!
Chapter Twenty-nine; Mistress Beka is in the fucking house.
Matt’s scaring me a little…. the weird part is that I kinda
like imagining him all protective and stuff. It goes with
his teddy bear image. I feel so bad for Zack and Andi. But
I wanna murder him at the same time. She clearly said to
stop and he didn’t. Asshole.
Chapter Thirty; Aww. So zombie like… I love Zack, he was an
asshole to her… but she’s so upset without him! I feel so
bad for hating Zack a little… -wipes tear away- I’M NOT
CRYING I SWEAR!
Chapter Thirty-one; I’m grinning at how sweet this is right
now. I seriously can’t stop. I love that they’re happy
together, they really do fit.
Takes a break to jam to some Billy Ocean.
Chapter Thirty-two; I wanna squish Johnny’s cheeks.
‘Tackled me for his pillow’ is that what we’re calling it
these days? ;] Aren’t all schools like that? Mine was a
complete nightmare… Far too happy to be in school! What’s
wrong with you woman?! Music teachers are always the
coolest teachers. Them and art teachers. In my experiences
anyway. Mr C sounds so much like Tommy, my music teacher.
He was everybody’s best friend and always wanted to chat
about anything and everything. Always had time for you, as
well. My iPod is on a blues streak. I have to say, I’m
rather enjoying it.
Chapter Thirty-three; I’d be exactly like Ash, just staring
and wondering if they were really real lol. Marie calm the
hell down! It’s sortit. Drunk Jason is so cute. And I don’t
even know why. I hate drunk people unless I’m drunk with
Chapter Thirty-four; Next time I’m in a hotel I am totally
playing hide and seek. I used to do it when I was a kid and
forgot all about it until just there. I just heard my
sister giggling and now I can’t stop. This had me laughing
a lot. Which is not good when you have two cracked ribs.
But it sounded like so much fun and then he finally caught
someone! I don’t even know why I’m making excuses for
laughing. I’m the only one in my room. I can laugh if I
want even if it does screw up my ribs.
Chapter Thirty-five; I am completely disappointed this
isn’t a chapter. Sigh.
The bluesy, jazzy stuff on my Pod didn’t last. LMFAO just
came blasting in my ears.
The REAL Chapter Thirty-five; October in Scotland equals
freezing cold wind and rain with a really big chance of
moody bastards in the street and some snow. I would kill
for a hot October. Speaking of hot….
Chapter Thirty-six; Food… -salivates- I’m hungry. I hate
Christmas but absolutely adore decorating with all the
sparkly stuff. The dog hates it though, she’s always got
tinsel wrapped around her collar. My dad still messes my
hair up when he passes me like this. It’s a guy thing, they
just don’t grow out of it. I want that snowflake! I don’t
wanna finish this chapter. NOOO!
Chapter Thirty-seven; -is crying too much to type anything
Chapter Thirty-eight; Still feeling pretty much the same as
I did last chapter. You wrote this fucking beautifully.
He’d have been proud. On another note, on the 9th Feb just
there I was in hospital getting my foot operated on. I was
awake for it and just randomly started laughing my ass off
at nothing. All I could think of was Jimmy and the duck. I
didn’t wanna explain that to the doctor, though. I just
thought it was kinda strange, I was pretty scared cause I
hate scalpels and that popped into my head. Gotta love some
I know I told you I was gonna post this after that chapter
but I lied.
Chapter Thirty-nine; NO! Find that freaking bracelet!
Chapter Forty; Zacky you asshole! That was soo lovely =’D
Chapter Forty-one; still awake over there? This dress
session sounds exactly like the one I had for my brother’s
wedding. The owner of the shop was horrified at our
descriptions of some of the dresses. It was fantastic.
Just to make this five page review a little longer, I gotta
throw in an actual reviewy past instead of just what I was
thinking while reading.
This story has become one of my favourites of all time. It
may have taken me a while to get through it all, prolonged
by the fact that I am an idiot and decided to have an
argument with some road. But I got here and the only thing
I really have to say is I love it. You know I love your
work from reviews on Hell’s but this blew me away.
There were hardships overcome and fluff thrown in that
always alleviated the seriousness. It was perfectly
balanced. I adore each and every one of your characters.
They all fit together perfectly.
You evoked emotions in the reader, made us hate Zack at
certain points, made us love him all over again. It was
amazing. It really was. And I’m glad I got to read it as a
whole instead of waiting for chapters because I probably
would have murdered you in my head a million times over if
I had had to wait for the whole Zacky being a dick scenario
to right itself. Doesn’t change the fact that I absolutely
adore this story and am officially planting the flag of my
love upon it.
I loved this and since this review is already over two
thousand words long, I’m just gonna post it.
|Part #41 - Chapter 38-
I cried during this chapter and last chapter.
It is beautiful.
Unrelatedly, i found a picture of The Rev's tombstone on
|Part #44 - Chapter 41/Land Of Dreams
Finally I have caught up with all the reading!
I've been so busy... etc etc etc. haha
Aw! Can't wait for the Beka's wedding :) It's should be amazing :D
Can't wait for more!
|~Embrace The Madness... foREVer~
*falls off the bed due to hysterical laughter*
It's even MORE funny than checking out all those dress pix together & making fun of them!!! Which, was all there, plus some!
I'm going to the 'Welcome to the Family Tour' too!
I'm so freakin' excited!
Good chapter by the way.
|Part #43 - Chapter 40/Land Of Dreams
He is such a romantic jerk! :D
|~Embrace The Madness... foREVer~
Yup, our fiance's are morons, but that's part of why we love them!
|Part #12 - Chapter 11-
OMFG Jazzy! I am SOOOOOOOOOOOO fucking love this story so
far! i've been home almost all week sick and reading your
story has been one of the few things that's help me not
feeling good. this story has truely to lifted my spirits all
week the way you've written your story. excellent dialogue
and great timing on the humorous parts in the story!! keep up
with the great work and i think you and Zacky sound like a
great couple! :D
|Part #42 - Chapter 39/Epilogue
I just got all caught up on this, and I'm not going to lie, I
cried like a little baby.
|~Embrace The Madness... foREVer~
he he he he he he he he he.....
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