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Alexa Vengeance                   (User #7468) N/A 07/08/2009 11:38:37pm

Oi. This could be a good story...but the speaker here is verrrrry confusing. If you're gonna use first person (i.e I looked into Brian's eyes and saw the love reflected in them), stick to that. Or stick to the other view. Just keep it consistant, please. I'm just saying this to help, honest. Clean up a few grammar mistakes (your vs. you're) and it has great potential!

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