i am sorry for just finding this...(I guess I suck at life)
Very much liked this!
so get to writing another story... :P
I liked it! I understand about the site problems...
it's messed up my formatting bazzillions of times. *sigh*
It was a little hard to read because of that, but otherwise--
I loved the repetition of phrases to emphasize a point,
and I loved how the cologne stayed so close to the plot all the way to the end.
Good job! =)
that was a really amazing story. =]
one thing i would suggest would be to not clump it all together, but separate it into paragraphs.
that would make it a lot easier to read and make the dialogue more discernable.
but all in all, that was an awesome story.